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there are two main reason why i have decided to attend bingston University next year . First of all, there is a question of money : Bingston tuition is reasonable , and i don't even have to pay it all at once . This is very important , since my father is not a rich man . With Bingston 's deffered payment plan , my father will be able to pay my tuition without too much difficulty. The second reason is the fine education which i feel i will receive there in agriculture , my chosen field . It is a well known fact that Bingston hires only the finest professors in its agriculture department . Moreover , the university requires all agricultural students to gain practical experience by working on local farms while they are still going to school